1 写作要求
某英文报社正就青少年与父母关系这一话题开展题为“How to keep a good relationship with parents”的征文活动。请你根据以下要点, 写一篇80个词左右的英语短文参加此次活动:
1 父母规矩太多, 过于强调学习成绩, 不理解自己等问题;
2 你对这些问题的看法;
3 你与父母保持良好关系的做法。
2 优秀范文
In my opinion, I have too many rules at home. My parents never allow me to go out with my friends at night. They don’t allow me to choose my own clothes, either. And they pay too much attention to my exam results. I think my parents don’t quite understand me.
However, I try my best to understand them. Although they don’t allow me to make my own decisions and give me too much pressure, I know that it is because they really love me and want me to have a bright future.
In order to keep a good relationship with my parents, I study hard, listen to them, talk to them as friends, tell them my troubles, and help them do more housework.
3 翻译、句子结构
In my opinion, I have too many rules at home.
在我看来，我在家里有太多规则。
状语：In my opinion
主语：I
谓语：have
宾语：too many rules
状语：at home
My parents never allow me to go out with my friends at night.
我的父母从不允许我在晚上和朋友出去。
主语：My parents
谓语：never allow
宾语：me
宾语补足语：to go out with my friends
状语：at night
They don’t allow me to choose my own clothes, either.
他们也不允许我选择自己的衣服。
主语：They
谓语：don’t allow
宾语：me
宾语补足语：to choose my own clothes
状语：either
And they pay too much attention to my exam results.
而且他们太关注我的考试成绩。
主语：they
谓语：pay
宾语：too much attention
状语：to my exam results
I think my parents don’t quite understand me.
我认为我的父母不太理解我。
主语：I
谓语：think
宾语从句：my parents don’t quite understand me
从句主语：my parents
从句谓语：don’t understand
从句宾语：me
However, I try my best to understand them.
然而，我尽力去理解他们。
状语：However
主语：I
谓语：try
状语：my best
宾语：to understand them
Although they don’t allow me to make my own decisions and give me too much pressure, I know that it is because they really love me and want me to have a bright future.
尽管他们不允许我做自己的决定，给我太多压力，但我知道这是因为他们真的爱我，希望我有一个光明的未来。
状语从句：Although they don’t allow me to make my own decisions and give me too much pressure
主语：I
谓语：know
宾语从句：that it is because they really love me and want me to have a bright future
从句主语：it
从句谓语：is
从句宾语：because they really love me and want me to have a bright future
In order to keep a good relationship with my parents, I study hard, listen to them, talk to them as friends, tell them my troubles, and help them do more housework.
为了和父母保持良好的关系，我努力学习，听他们的话，像朋友一样和他们交谈，向他们倾诉我的烦恼，并帮助他们做更多的家务。
状语：In order to keep a good relationship with my parents
主语：I
谓语：study hard, listen to them, talk to them as friends, tell them my troubles, and help them do more housework
4 句子逻辑
第一句至第五句表达了作者对家庭规则的不满，认为父母不理解自己。
第六句至第七句表达了作者尽管不满，但仍然努力理解父母。
第八句解释了作者理解父母的原因，即父母的严格是出于爱和对未来的期望。
最后一句总结了作者为保持良好亲子关系所采取的行动。
5 作文点评
优点：
主题明确：文章围绕“家庭规则和亲子关系”展开，主题明确。
内容丰富：详细描述了家庭规则、父母的严格以及作者的理解和努力，内容丰富。
结构清晰：文章有明确的开头、中间和结尾，逻辑性强。
语言简洁：使用了简洁明了的语言，易于理解。
不足：
词汇和句式多样性：文章中使用的词汇和句式较为基础，可以增加一些高级词汇和复杂句式，以提升文章的表达效果。
深度分析：文章虽然描述了家庭规则和作者的感受，但缺少对这种亲子关系背后更深层次原因的探讨
