IIOT 论文修改总结

Writing skills

写作逻辑：

论文里面的每一句话都要检查，问这么几个问题：1）这句话对我全文或者本段落表达的意思起到作用了么？如果没有作用，再好的话也要删掉；2）这句话和上一句话、下一句话的逻辑是顺畅的么？如果不顺畅，那就可能要加过渡的词句；3）这句话我表达的意思有歧义么？是否是清晰的？是否用了一些非常含糊不清的词，比如我的效果很好，什么效果好，好到什么程度？

1. 题目当中可以有常见的缩写，但如果一个缩写不常见，最好写完整的。

IOT-常见, IIOT-不常见

2. Internet of Things (IoT) is a technology that connects physical sensors, machines and devices that monitor the states of the physical world via the Internet \cite{whitmore2015internet}.  

第一句话就出现了两个从句，英文论文用语一定要简介，避免复杂句型

Internet of Things (IoT) describes the connection of physical objects which monitor the states of the physical world via the Internet \cite{whitmore2015internet}.

3. IoT technologies are increasingly used in various sectors such as transport, healthcare, retail, logistics, manufacturing, agriculture, buildings and others.

这句话要有参考文献.

4.  这个contribution感觉总结的还不够好，建议整合成三个，每个说清楚一点。注意，contribution是说哪些是新的，而不是做了什么都要列出来.

 

 

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1. 量词 a the; 

a technology; a case study; a process; effectiveness and a good performance; 

2. spelling

comparison; 

3. phases

hot water temperature; a heating production plant; 

4. tense

The paper has proposed a lightweight data stream processing framework for industrial IoT applications, including integration of heterogeneous data sources, distributed computing, data analysis and workflow automation. The proposed framework uses a container-based distributed computing system to support flexible deployment, increase application portability and shorten software delivery cycles. This paper has demonstrated the suitability of an online anomaly detection framework, including model training and real-time anomaly detection on a real industrial use case. We have demonstrated the process of the case under study, including DAG data flow, task planning and state monitoring. Finally, this paper has evaluated the proposed anomaly detection method and data stream processing framework, and the results demonstrated the efficiency and effectiveness for an industrial application.

 

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